Some Sentences I Admire

Shannon Brown: The original focus for the documentary was to commemorate the death of a human, but as she peeled back the layers of lies she discovered that the real story was how we have created the killer.

Kody Clark: The society in Bradbury’s novel has devolved to new savagery, a fully censored society that has no point but to provide the people with instant satisfaction.

Lindsey Cohen: I am standing on the knot in a tug-of-war game.

Cassidy Crawford: How can you defy society’s beauty standards if you cast a woman who is a professional actress, educated and former spokesperson for multiple beauty and cosmetic companies, and has previously modeled before—a woman who meets each and every unrealistic standard of society’s so-called perfection?

Sarah Ripley Forsyth: My interpretation of her idea of capitalism revolves around her references to “the men of the mind.” The men of the mind are those who view work as an act of philosophy, productive efforts as a standard means of their moral values.

Kaylynn Hanna: What is important to me while I read the books is not whether Severus Snape said something “maliciously” or “spitefully” but rather the story line, and the fact that even though I know the story line by heart, when I get to a particularly exciting part, my heart still races and I read the pages with ferocious speed, unable to wait for the outcome. In actuality, I believe that improving the level of writing would most likely have lessened the book’s appeal.

Jihad Holmes: To conclude, when you sit down and read a poem, some thinking must be done.

Alexandria Miller: I taught myself to read in Kindergarten and tried to gain a new personal record every summer for the amount of books I read. My personal record currently rests at 105 books in one summer. I was ten.

Marissa Norris: The governess is in a constant battle for a sense of self belonging; she fits in nowhere, not with the wealthy house owners, not with the lower class servants.

Jaclyn Romano: They are playing way too safely and need to take a bigger “risk” (I put quotes around the word risk because it should not be considered a risk to use an everyday woman as a model) and use a representation of the many kinds of women in this world to really make a stand for body positivity.

Sofia Romero: Through mirroring, we as readers are able to witness the ways in which the characters and Shelley struggled with their imperfections.

Rachel Rosen: Standing naked in a body of water during her death scene, Chopin makes a connection between birth and death, creating a full cycle that the author makes feel pure and beautiful.

Justin Rosenberg: Even as reviewers tried not to like the themes, the characters, or the style of this story, it seems to be one that hooks the reader. I know it hooked me.

Caila Scarpitti: A common phenomenon that swept across the world was a lack of enjoyment for reading anything after the Harry Potter novels, a side-effect that I still suffer from (much to my book-loving mother’s dismay). If you simply Google ‘what to read after Harry Potter’ you find a plethora of articles that are practically self-help guides.

Joe Schwab: As a respondent to a message it is important to acknowledge and answer in an equally proportional manner to the original text.

Tiffany Sewell: Whether critics have used the quotation marks to suggest that the information is not factual or that the information is presented as propaganda does not change that the movie contains facts: Tilikum was an accomplice in the death of Keltie Byrne (SeaWorld of Hurt), Dawn Brancheau was a trainer at SeaWorld Orland who was killed by Tilikum on February 24, 2010 (Fox News), OSHA did sue SeaWorld Orlando after her death (Department of Labor); the list of facts continues.

Laura Statts: However, looking at the popularity of Lovecraftian plots in widely consumed media, it is obvious that his stories are as easily absorbed as Barker’s when the false mask of unfamiliar sentence structure falls away.

Casey Stum: The image of a dying sheep wrapped in a man’s arms, beaten and bloody, resonated with millions of people worldwide — or at least until their eyes lowered to the logo in the bottom right-hand corner: PETA.

Liam Sullivan: He is surprisingly more educated on the topic of religion than many of the people who follow it, “like an ex-smoker who grows to loathe the habit more than those who have not tasted nicotine” (Riddell).

Toan Tran: The battlefield in Saving Private Ryan was filled with blood, guts, bodies, body parts, flesh—just anything within the body of a human being—all over the field.


Class, Tues, 5/17



  • Sentences I Admire
  • Essays on Medium
  • Arcade: View the work your classmates have posted. Note at least three cool things people have done in digitizing their essays.

To Do

  1. Submit your best piece to Arak!

Essays on Medium

Shannon Brown, Redefining Killer in Killer Whale

Kody Clark, Fahrenheit 451’s Dystopian Reality

Lindsey Cohen, Marketing in the Grey Area

Cassidy Crawford, Body Positive or Body Shaming?

Sarah Ripley Forsyth, A Story of Starvation

Kaylynn Hanna, The Wonderful Wizarding World

Jihad Holmes, Where Does It End?

Alexandria Miller, A Transfer of Consciousness

Marissa Norris, Investigating Ambiguity

Zac Olsen, Harry Potter: Sexism or Over-Analyzing?

Sofia Romero, Mirroring in Frankenstein

Rachel Rosen, A “Beautiful” Suicide

Justin Rosenberg, We Create Our Own Destiny

Caila Scarpitti, Who Was Harry Potter Written For?

Joe Schwab, Digital Communication: With ‘Friends’

Tiffany Sewell, Blackfish: Whale Tales or Truth?

Laura Statts, The Analysis of Fear

Casey Stum, Violence in the Wool Industry

Liam Sullivan, Hitchens’ Claim

Toan Tran, Saving Private Ryan: Anti-War or Pro-War?

Class, Thurs, 5/12

p8: Digitizing Essay Two

Using Digital Affordances: Some Examples

Posting to Medium

Digitizing Essay Two

Trade essays with a partner. Read through your partner’s piece looking for points where she or he might “digitize” their essay through adding a:

  • Hyperlink
  • Image
  • Video clip
  • Audio clip

Mark these possible additions in the margin or on another piece of paper. Try to make it as clear as you can what you think the author might do. (For instance, “add image from the ad campaign here”, or “insert link to critic’s essay here”.) Try to suggest at least five items the author might add to her or his essay.

Once you get your essay back, open up your laptop and do some googling to see if you can make the additions your reader has suggested.

To Do

  1. Tues, 5/17, class: Post your digitized Essay Two to Medium. Email me the link. Bring your laptop with you for our arcade..

Digitizing Essay Two (p8)

For your final assignment for this course, I’d like you to revise your second essay in ways that make thoughtful use of the affordances of writing in a digital space. An affordance is something that a particular medium allows you to do easily or well. The affordances of digital writing include

  • incorporating images into your writing;
  • linking directly to other online texts;
  • quoting audio or video clips in your essay; and
  • adding audio or video clips that you have produced to your essay.

Your task is to use some of these affordances to revise and re-present your second essay on I will be especially impressed if the changes or additions you make lead to some new writing. That is, if you insert an image into your essay, don’t let it just sit there, comment on it, analyze it. If you link to other texts, tell us what it is you want us to notice about them. If you use audio or video, be thoughtful in editing the clip; go right to the moment in the song or film that you want to focus our attention on.

Be creative. Take some risks. If I think your essay is improved by the changes you make, I will raise your grade for e2d3. But if you try something and it doesn’t work—no worries, your grade won’t be affected.

To post your work to Medium, you will need to set up a free account on the site. I will walk you through the actual mechanics of posting in class—it’s straightforward and easy—and we’ll also look at some examples of what other writers have done on the site. I’ve also posted a brief set of hints on Formatting on Medium. I hope that, like me, you’ll find Medium an elegant and appealing platform for writing.

Please post your essay sometime before our final class at 12:30 on Tuesday, 5/17. Please email me the link to your essay, and please bring your laptop with you to class. We will take some time to view the work you have all done in a kind of electronic “arcade”.

Class,Tues, 5/10

Essay Two (e2d3): Finishing Work

Stage One: Copy-Editing

Exchange drafts with the person next to you. Read your partner’s draft closely, pen in hand,  ready to make corrections, offer suggestions, or otherwise point to work that needs to be done. In particular, I’d like you to look closely at:

  • First Page: Name, Date, Assignment (e2d3), Title (e2d3)
  • Following Pages: Running Head with short title and page numbers
  • Paragraphs: These should be indented or separated by an extra space
  • Quotations: All direct quotes must be clearly identified. Quotes running more than a sentence should be blocked (BLQ).
  • In-Text Citations
    • Underline the titles of works as you encounter them in the text. Check to see if they also appear in the list of references. If they do, put a check by the title in both the main text and references. If they don’t, circle the name or title and write “Ref?” in the margin.
    • Titles: Italics for long works; “Quotes” for short ones.
    • Page citations: Every quote should be followed by a page number (or time marker). If  you don’t see one, circle the end of the quote and write  “Page #?” in the margin
  • References
    • Alphabetical?
    • Author, date, title, publisher/place.
    • Links should be live.

Please also correct any typos, misspellings, missing words, or other errors you may come across. If you’re not sure how to fix a certain mistake, circle it and write “?” in the margin.

Sign your name when you are done. This will remind the writer to thank you in their acknowledgments.

Stage Two: Back Matter

  • References: Check to see these are complete and correct. Make any needed changes.
  • Author’s Note: Write.
  • Acknowledgments: Write.

To Do

  1. Thurs, 5/12, class: Bring a print copy of your final essay and your laptop. We will work in class on digitizing your pieces.
  2. Tues, 5/17, class: Bring your laptop. We will present your digitized essays (r10) in class.

Essay Two, Final (e2d3)

The final version of your second essay for this course (e2d3) is due on Wednesday, 5/11, at 11:00 am.  Please post this piece to your individual folder on Google Drive.

You have worked on this piece for several weeks, so my expectations for your writing are high. I will look for an essay that adds to the critical conversation about a text that you have read closely, that is written in a clear and personal style, and that has been carefully crafted, edited, and proofread.

Please also make sure your essay includes the following back matter:

  • Acknowledgments: Write a few sentences in which you thank the people who have helped you write this piece. These might include your TA, the members of your workshop group, Writing Center tutors, roommates, friends, family members, and any other persons who have read your writing or talked about your ideas with you. This is a time to be generous.
  • Author’s Note: Write a brief account of how you developed this essay. How did the piece change and grow as you worked on it? What parts do you now feel most proud of?
  • References: You must include a list of references to the works you discuss in your essay. You may use any standard documentation style (e.g., APA, Chicago, MLA) that you feel comfortable with.  But make sure you include the four key elements (author, date, title, location or publisher) of a citation that we have discussed in class.

Mark off each of these sections with a subheading .

Finally, be professional: Proofread. Carefully. Make sure your references are complete and your links work. This is the time to fuss the details. You want the final form of your text to clearly show the hard work you have put into it.

I’m eager to read your essay! I will use the same form as before in grading your work. Good luck!